Friday, September 19, 2014

Draft One

Finney 1
Jill Finney
RWS 100
Mr. Werry
08 September 2014
Updates, Tweets, Emails, and Blogs…
How does tweeting, blogging, texting and the endless amounts of time spent on the Internet change how we think? Do we actually get dumbed-down? Or is the Internet phenomenon producing better, more accomplished writers? In Smarter Than You Think, by Clive Thompson, specifically his article titled “Public Thinking”, he argues that the Internet has contributed to a generation that is smarter and can write more complexly than any other before them. He argues that students aren’t really getting the credit that they deserve; studies have shown that college students today are overall smarter than their parents were. Shockingly enough, this is due to social medias, and the needs to always be writing; whether it is tweeting, updates on Facebook, email, or blogging for the world to see. Kids are writing to audiences, and knowing that they have people reading their works; their writing is improving. Of course there are many arguments behind technology’s role in our lives, and Thompson’s main focus is on how it has changed our cognitive behaviors. Thompson attempts to show his audience the evolution of writing in the world by providing the readers many examples. These are not only from studies, but also personal interactions with his mother, and statistical information. He weighs the advantages of technology rather than seeing the typical view: that it’s destroying our brains. Thompson persuades us to believe that the vast increase in public writing through the inspiration of the Internet is causing a beneficial change for individuals and society as a whole. In this paper, I will go into further detail regarding multiple claims made by Thompson as well as analyze the evidence backing up those claims. Through thorough examination of this article, I can better understand the deeper meaning to Thompsons work.
            Thompson introduces his article with a short story about a young student who starts a blog. Although she centered most of her writings on the corrupt society of her home country, Kenya, she was able to reach many people through daily blog posts. Like anyone else, she thought she had “zero ideas to say” (Thompson 45), however she later discovered that with seven years of blogging not only did it lead to “a witty, passionate voice, keyed perfectly to online conversation” (Thompson 45) but also “two telephone sized books” (Thompson 46) with millions of ideas. This piece introduces the reader to the majority of Thompson’s further claims in the remainder of the article. Additionally, the piece connects with many readers. Like Okolloh, many people don’t feel very strongly about writing but knowing that a young Kenyan woman can do it, provides a sort of inspiration that others can do it as well.  Anyone, anywhere can write and be a successful writer. This strategy of intriguing the reader and connecting on a personal level is very effective and provides a solid base for the rest of Thompson’s paper.
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            In order to support his overall argument, that “the Internet has produced a Niagara of writing” (Thompson 43) that has created “a global culture of writers”(Thompson 50) Thompson utilizes a variety of strategies and evidence to persuade the audience into his way of thinking. He makes claims that Internet writings can “clarify our thinking” (Thompson 51) and cognitive skills. With a introduction to a interview Thompson did with bloggers they came to him to say, “they’ll get an idea for a blog post and sit down at the keyboard in a state of excitement…soon thinking that someone will read this as soon as its posted” (Thompson 52) thus causing the blogger to think twice about what to write. Our cognition has been altered due to the fact that an audience is now listening and reading. Founder of DuckDuckGo Gabriel Weinburg presents the idea of defending your papers through a phenomenon known as “hand-waveyness” (Thompson 53), essentially no one wants to crash and burn but so out of desperation to try and make a failed paper presentable to an audience, you hand wave. “Even if I was publishing it [a blog, article] to no one, it’s just the threat of an audience…if someone could come across it [the paper] in my name, I have to take it more seriously” (Thompson 54), Thompson uses this Weinburg quote to back up his cognition theory. Literally due to the fact that majority of writing is now publicly written, the cognitive process has altered significantly in all of us. The weight is now on our shoulders.
            Clive claims that these new forms of digital writings significantly improve writing and thinking. Looking further into the argument of the audience affect and how publicity can alter the way humans think and represent themselves through their writings Thompson continues on with a study done by Brenna Clark Clay, an English professor from Douglas College of British Columbia. Assigning her students to create a wiki page for all of their class documents caused stunning results. The use of Wikipedia transformed their writing, “it was like night and day”(Thompson 56). Even if the audience was only a few people, or classmates, the audience affect still takes place. Thompson further stated, “going from an audience of zero (talking to yourself) to an audience of ten people (a few friends or random strangers checking out your online post) is so big that its actually huger than going from ten people to a million people”(Thompson 56). Expanding on the idea of alternative thinking, Thompson claims that writing can also improve your memory in what is known as the generation effect. “Generating text yourself, ‘requires more cognitive effort than does reading, and effort increases memorability”(Thompson 57), researchers state. Once the thoughts of our mind become public, connections start to be made everywhere. This is another key component to Thompson’s overall argument, “making connections is a big deal in the history of thought- and it’s the future” (Thompson 58). The theory of multiples was introduced by sociologists William Ogburn and Dorothy Thomas, to show the world that, “our ideas are, in a crucial way, partly products of our environment” (Thompson 59). However, our ideas often occur simultaneously, many people could have the same ideas but would never make the connection due to nothing being public. Much like that of the past, people didn’t have a way to spread word so many had the same ideas at the same time. Due to the evolution of society, multiples can be resolved, “the Internet, which encourages public thinking and resolves multiples on a much larger scale….its now the worlds most powerful engine for putting heads together” (Thompson 61).

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            As a result of Thompsons article and the multiple claims, evidence and strategies that he uses, “Public Thinking” is a very strong paper. He outlines his claims very well and convinces the reader/audience that technology is good for all of us. Not only are we developing better cognition skills, we are improving our memories, making connections among ideas with much more ease, and creating a generation of avid writers that can blow away the writers of the past. Technology is a relatively young idea and to this point, it has caused so many benefits for our society. With time it will grow stronger and be able to create many more generations of writers that can write complexly and strongly about any topic. In Thompsons article, he captures these ideas very well.

Wednesday, September 17, 2014

Quote Ninja

Finney 1
Jill Finney
RWS 100
Mr. Werry
08 September 2014
Updates, Tweets, Emails, and Blogs…
How does tweeting, blogging, texting and the endless amounts of time spent on the Internet change how we think? Do we actually get dumbed-down? Or is the Internet phenomenon producing better, more accomplished writers? In Smarter Than You Think, by Clive Thompson, specifically his article titled “Public Thinking”, he argues that the Internet has contributed to a generation that is smarter and can write more complexly than any other before them. He argues that students aren’t really getting the credit that they deserve; studies have shown that college students today are overall smarter than their parents were. Shockingly enough, this is due to social medias, and the needs to always be writing; whether it is tweeting, updates on Facebook, email, or blogging for the world to see. Kids are writing to audiences, and knowing that they have people reading their works; their writing is improving. Of course there are many arguments behind technology’s role in our lives, and Thompson’s main focus is on how it has changed our cognitive behaviors. Thompson attempts to show his audience the evolution of writing in the world by providing the readers many examples. These are not only from studies, but also personal interactions with his mother, and statistical information. He weighs the advantages of technology rather than seeing the typical view: that it’s destroying our brains. Thompson persuades us to believe that the vast increase in public writing through the inspiration of the Internet is causing a beneficial change for individuals and society as a whole. In this paper, I will go into further detail regarding multiple claims made by Thompson as well as analyze the evidence backing up those claims. Through thorough examination of this article, I can better understand the deeper meaning to Thompsons work.
            Thompson introduces his article with a short story about a young student who starts a blog. Although she centered most of her writings on the corrupt society of her home country, Kenya, she was able to reach many people through daily blog posts. Like anyone else, she thought she had “zero ideas to say” (Thompson 45), however she later discovered that with seven years of blogging not only did it lead to “a witty, passionate voice, keyed perfectly to online conversation” (Thompson 45) but also “two telephone sized books” (Thompson 46) with millions of ideas. This piece introduces the reader to the majority of Thompson’s further claims in the remainder of the article. Additionally, the piece connects with many readers. Like Okolloh, many people don’t feel very strongly about writing but knowing that a young Kenyan woman can do it, provides a sort of inspiration that others can do it as well.  Anyone, anywhere can write and be a successful writer. This strategy of intriguing the reader and connecting on a personal level is very effective and provides a solid base for the rest of Thompson’s paper.
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            In order to support his overall argument, that “the Internet has produced a Niagara of writing” (Thompson 43) that has created “a global culture of writers”(Thompson 50) Thompson utilizes a variety of strategies and evidence to persuade the audience into his way of thinking. He makes claims that Internet writings can “clarify our thinking” (Thompson 51). By introducing a interview Thompson did with bloggers they came to him to say, “they’ll get an idea for a blog post and sit down at the keyboard in a state of excitement…soon thinking that someone will read this as soon as its posted” (Thompson 52) thus causing the blogger to think twice about what to write. Our cognition has been altered due to the fact that an audience is now listening and reading. Founder of DuckDuckGo Gabriel Weinburg presents the idea of defending your papers through a phenomenon known as “hand-waveyness” (Thompson 53), essentially no one wants to crash and burn but the desperate need to try and make a failed paper presentable to an audience, you hand wave. “Even if I was publishing it [a blog, article] to no one, it’s just the threat of an audience…if someone could come across it [the paper] in my name, I have to take it more seriously” (Thompson 54), Thompson uses this Weinburg quote to back up his cognition theory. Literally due to the fact that majority of writing is now publicly written, the cognitive process has altered significantly in all of us.


Friday, September 12, 2014

Thompson Response: Updates, Tweets, Emails, and Blogs

Finney 1
Jill Finney
RWS 100
Mr. Werry
08 September 2014
Updates, Tweets, Emails, and Blogs…
            How does tweeting, blogging, texting and the endless amounts of time spent on the Internet change how we think? Do we actually get dumbed-down? Or is the Internet phenomenon producing better, more accomplished writers? In Smarter Than You Think, by Clive Thompson, specifically his article titled “Public Thinking”, he argues that the Internet has contributed to a generation that is smarter and can write more complexly than any other before them. Students aren’t really getting the credit that they deserve; studies have shown that college students today are overall smarter than their parents were. Shockingly enough, this is due to social medias, and the needs to always be writing; whether it is tweeting, updates on Facebook, email, or blogging for the world to see. Kids are writing to audiences, and are knowingly having people reading their works; hence their writing is improving. Of course there are many arguments behind technology’s role in our lives, and Thompson’s main focus is on how it has changed our cognitive behaviors. Thompson attempts to show his audience the evolution of writing in the world by providing the readers many examples. These can be from not only studies, but also personal interactions with his mother. He weighs the advantages of technology rather than seeing the typical view: that it’s destroying our brains. In this paper, I will go into further detail regarding the multiple other claims made by Thompson as well as analyze the evidence backing up those claims. Through thorough examination of this article, I can better understand the deeper meaning to Thompsons work.
            Thompson introduces his article with a short story about a young student who starts a blog. Although she centered most of her writings on the corrupt society of her home country, Kenya, she was able to reach many people through daily blog posts. Like anyone else, she thought she had “zero ideas to say” (Thompson 45), however she later discovered that over seven years of blogging led to not only  “a witty, passionate voice, keyed perfectly to online conversation” (Thompson 45) but also “two telephone sized books” (Thompson 46) with millions of ideas. This piece introduces the reader to the majority of Thompson’s further claims in the remainder of the article. Additionally, this short story about young Okolloh can function as a piece of connection with readers. Like Okolloh, many people don’t feel very strongly about writing but knowing that a young Kenyan woman can do it, provides a sort of inspiration that others can do it as well.  Anyone, anywhere can write and be a successful writer. It doesn’t matter where you’re from or what you write about; there are always people listening. This strategy of intriguing the reader and connecting on a personal level is very effective and provides a solid base for the rest of Thompson’s paper. Leading to his next main idea that, “The Internet has produced a foaming Niagara of writing”(Thompson 46). In making this statement Thompson transitions to the first element of his arguments.

            

Thursday, September 4, 2014

Thompson Response Continued

Finney 1
Jill Finney
RWS 100
Mr. Werry
05 September 2014
Thompson Response Continued
1.     How evolved is the current generations writing due to the various social medias and Internet usage?  How do you relate to the current generations and the past generations, how old are you?
2.     Two elements that I found most persuasive about Thompsons argument were his use of multiple statistics and testimonies from real studies. This intrigued the reader, overwhelming that we write that much in a day; and with real studies as a contribution it established credibility.  I think his weakest point was the study with the children, I didn’t understand its relevance, I feel as though it was awkwardly thrown in.

3.     I think that Thompson introduces the article with this short story to show the reader/ audience just how greatly one person can write. Okkolloh was a very influential blogger and was able to get a lot of information out to the public without even realizing it. All her writings complied to be about the size of two telephone books, unknowingly to her; she had written all of that! So with this story I think Thompson is trying to accomplish that people everyday write a lot more than we are given credit for. This idea connected the astonishing stats about a average persons daily writing.

Tuesday, September 2, 2014

Thompson Response

Finney 1

Jill Finney
Mr. Werry
RWS 100
03 September 2014
Thompsons “Public Thinking” Response
            In Thompson’s article, “Public Thinking”, he addresses the topic of writing in today’s society. He starts his article with a brief story about a young female blogger from Kenya who wrote about the corruption of her country; branching to daily life and even her love of the Steelers. However this is all quite irrelevant to the main message that Thompson wants to get across to his readers. What Thompson is really saying can be found on pg. 51 of the article, “We are now a global culture or avid writers…we’re also writing a stunning amount of material about things we are simply interested in- our hobbies, or friends, or weird things we’ve read or seen online, sports, current events, last nights episode of our favorite TV show.” (Thompson 51). This prompts the question, “how is this all changing our cognitive behavior?” (Thompson 51), which is the number one question of the article.
            There are three main ways that Thompson tries to answer this question. They include but are not limited to, the following claims. The first, “For one, It can help clarify our thinking” (Thompson 51).  “The explosion of online writing has a second aspect that is even more important than the first, though: it is almost always done for an audience,” provides for the framework of the second claim (Thompson 52). Lastly, Thompson states, “Once thinking is public, connections take over.” (Thompson 58).
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In stating these three claims Thompson uses evidence such as Expert Testimony, Experimental, and Individual Examples. In talking about his first claim Thompson uses Expert Testimony by tying in how poets complete their works. “I [Cecil Day-Lewis] do not sit down at my desk to put into verse something that is already clear in my mind….If it were clear in my mind, I should have no incentive or need to write about it….” (Thompson 51). In this piece of evidence from expert Cecil Day-Lewis; it can be explained that yes cognition is clarified by writing thoughts down. Lewis doesn’t have a topic in mind when he goes to write about poetry; but when he writes he is writing to understand his thoughts better. Thus relating back to the first claim that writing creates a clearer image of thought for individuals. Moving on to Thompsons next piece of evidence of Personal Anecdotes for his claim regarding always writing to an audience. “…a group of Vanderbilt University professors in 2008 published a study in which several dozen four and five year olds were shown patterns of colored bugs and asked to predict which would be next in sequence” (Thompson 55). Thompson further elaborates that in this particular study the kids were divided into groups (one group did puzzle silently, second group talked aloud to themselves through the puzzle, third had to show mom how to complete the puzzle) the group that had the highest success rates happened to be talking to mom, because she is a very important audience. Obviously this form of evidence directly backs up Thompsons claim about audiences and how writing to an audience creates an overall better writing. Lastly, Individual Examples, “Anyone who’s googled their favorite hobby….the Internet is a connection making machine” (Thompson 58). In this last bit Thompson uses himself as an example to show his personal, individual connection with the reader.







































Works Cited
Thompson, Clive. "Public Thinking_." Smarter than You Think: How Technology Is Changing Our Minds for the Better. 45-69. Print.